tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-36913480.post2369104671643025417..comments2023-02-09T06:47:30.829-05:00Comments on Antijenic Drift: Writing Assignment #2Jenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02258011621537392465noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-36913480.post-25743520540947167692012-10-24T08:24:03.488-04:002012-10-24T08:24:03.488-04:00I liked the elephant story. I thought it was very ...I liked the elephant story. I thought it was very well written and very descriptive. I can kind of see what your classmates are saying - the story has a kind of eerie calm quality. But maybe it WAS eerie and calm? Maybe include something about the volume? Were people shouting? Were the elephants loud? I know you called it a silent parade, but was it?<br /><br />I like this second one too! You've done a great job of showing Momo's personality I think. Though her personality comes through more in your description of her and her actions, rather than her words. I can see YOU through your words though, but maybe that's because I know you :)<br /><br />I think it's awesome that you're taking this class! I hope you're enjoying it!Sarahhttp://skdecoratethis.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com